There are some good observations, but I got tired reading it. Does he really have to repeat “Uh, don’t look!” a zillion times, or is he trying to hypnotize us or something.
Bloggers, please have mercy on us the readers for chrissakes.
Mercy?!! Mercy?!! From me?!
Gee, I guess I should apologize for sneaking up behind you and forcibly scraping your eyes across my text so that you couldn’t, you know, just skip the first few words in each paragraph?
I can just imagine this guy being exposed to poetry:
Hey, did you notice the last word in some of those lines sounded alike?
And by the way, people who pop in here once just to see a specific thing aren’t readers. They’re johns.